A teacher in a writing class I took years
ago (great teacher, great class) taught me to “start with the change,” to begin
a story when the character’s life is shifting gears. Today I’m looking at the first two books in
the Rainbow Rock series to see how I did. First, here is the opening of Book 1:
RIDE THE RAINBOW HOME.
"Oh!" Meg jumped as lightning crashed overhead. She swerved
slightly, but fought her sports car back into her lane. July had come to the
high plateau and with it, a typical afternoon thundershower. To Margaret
Taylor, who hadn't seen the plateau for years, the storm was anything but
typical. Lightning danced along the ridges and shimmered through the valley of
the Little Colorado River, sending thunder rumbling in its wake. Giant
thunderheads loomed thousands of feet above the red sandstone cliffs, pierced here
and there by shafts of yellow light that brought heaven to earth. Meg watched
in wonder as she pushed east along I-40, back to the land she had once called
home.
Home? Rainbow Rock had never been home. The five years she'd spent there had
been the worst of her life. The jeers she had suffered as stepdaughter to Lon
Ramsdell, the high school principal, had been ravaging: "teacher's
pet," "killjoy," "goody-goody," and so much worse.
With relief she had grabbed her diploma and hit the road for UCLA, vowing never
to return.
And she hadn't. Not for ten years, years she had spent putting adolescence
behind her and building a career in management training. But time had softened
the sting of those old wounds. Maybe it was time to make her peace.
Similarly, Book 2: AT THE RAINBOW’S END also starts with a main character
driving.
A stiff breeze scoured the desert floor, catching powdery snowflakes and
drifting them against the roots of the greasewood and creosote bushes. Kurt
McAllister watched the would-be storm with tepid interest, idly reminded of the
way his mother used to sift powdered sugar onto freshly baked gingerbread.
It had been a good meeting in Gallup that morning. If all went as planned,
Rainbow Productions would soon have a contract for an exclusive series of
educational videos. They had a funding proposal in for a documentary on Navajo
weaving and were already paying their bills with pickup jobs for weddings,
birthdays, graduations, and family reunions. In the four years since he had
established his business with the woman who was now his sister-in-law, Kurt and
Meg had built an inventory of successful management training programs that were
bringing in steady income.
They were earning a strong reputation in the field and had recently moved
into a larger storefront office in Holbrook. All was going splendidly, better
than expected.
So why, Kurt wondered as he gunned the engine of his shiny new pickup and
pulled into the I-40 fast lane, did he feel like chewing rails and spitting
spikes? Frustration seemed to dog his heels these days, faithful as a
bloodhound and not one bit prettier.
The road sign showed that Holbrook and his turnoff were still twenty-seven
miles away as Kurt punched up the speed to pass a black touring car, but the
added speed did nothing to decrease his restlessness. Neither did the fact that
there was no apparent reason for it.
Things were going splendidly in the business. The only weak area they'd had
from the beginning had been scriptwriting. Meg wrote the basic script when they
did a management training video, and his brother Jim, an expert in Navajo and
Hopi art, wrote most of their documentary pieces. So far, there had always been
someone at the community college in Holbrook who could refine their scripts.
Though he and Meg had spoken of hiring a professional scriptwriter—and they'd
have to get someone if they got the documentary on Navajo weaving—that seemed
more an opportunity than a problem. So it had to be something else that was
wringing his stomach.
As I look at those two excerpts, I get the feeling I listened to that great
teacher.
All six books in the Rainbow Rock series are now available for E-readers:
Kindle, Nook, Apple devices, and through Kobo, Smashwords and OverDrive for
everything else. Presently the first book is being offered FREE.